Umma Sura

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May 13th, 2017, 11:07 am
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Spirit of Water May 13th, 2017, 1:29 pm
So I haven't commented until now, but I have to say:

Wow. This chapter has so much *beautiful* narrative direction. Of course there are some things that Zaynab might not have known or pulled from conjecture or hearsay, but there were several instances where it was so much more powerful to tell by implication/directing the camera elsewhere (like Zaynab's mother's death at the end). And then, after the reader has seen her history (alongside the significance of her tea), have her summarize it with simply "My mother is dead." She has not told Bridgette a thing, but the reader knows. I felt a punch to the gut. *Beautiful* narration. Kudos.

A couple of questions: Is her uncle really her father? Or will we learn that next?
Kinggigasmon May 13th, 2017, 10:07 pm
@Spirit of Water: Thank you for your comment! It means a lot!

I don't recall introducing an uncle for Zaynab. What were you referring to if I may ask?
Spirit of Water May 14th, 2017, 7:14 pm
@Kinggigasmon: You're very welcome! It's a well-earned kudos. :)

No problem: I could have sworn that the butcher (for the halal [?] meat that Bridgette was sent for) was introduced as her uncle, when she first meets Zaynab. (I've probably misremembered, I'm sorry.)
Kinggigasmon May 14th, 2017, 7:38 pm
@Spirit of Water: No, that was unfortunately her father, the same guy in the flashback, just older.
Spirit of Water May 15th, 2017, 2:09 pm
@Kinggigasmon: Unfortunately, too, but that makes sense. Thanks for your help! :)